Kudos to the lovely and talented Susanna Leonard Hill and her most excellent contests for writers. This week she is hosting the Valentiny Contest where each participant has been instructed to write a valentine story for children under the age of twelve in 214 words or less.
And believe it or not, my word count came out to 214 exactly! So as instructed, here is my entry for the contest. I hope you all enjoy.
Grumpy’s Secret
Valentine
Grumpy Bear hammered ferociously and stepped back to look at
his progress. He didn’t smile, but he did look satisfied with the sign he had
just nailed to his fence. It read__ KEEP OUT!
Grumpy Bear, whose real name was Harold, hadn’t always been
grumpy. At one time he had been cheerful.
That was, until his true love Genevieve moved away. Her father had been offered
a job beyond the mountain and that was the last Harold ever saw her.
As days passed, he became grumpier and grumpier. He became
so grumpy that even the mail man tried to avoid him, which wasn’t difficult
since he never received any mail.
But one day that changed. The mailman stared in amazement at
a pretty pink envelope smelling of roses. It was addressed to Harold. The
astounded mailman slowly walked to the gate and held it out.
Harold was equally surprised. Gently, he pulled out a heart
shaped Valentine. It was signed__Your Secret Admirer. Harold blinked and looked
around. Just then he saw Genevieve walking down the street.
She told him she was the new teacher and would be living
just around the corner. Harold’s face lit up with a smile that went from ear to
ear. After that, no one ever called him Grumpy again.
Such a heart warmer. Very cute!
ReplyDeleteThank you Miss Jaclyn :0)
DeleteAdorable. It made me all cozy inside. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Ms. Robyn :0)
DeleteSweet story! I'm so glad Grumpy Bear went back to being cheerful Harold in the end.
ReplyDeleteThanks. Me too :0)
DeleteWhat a cute story! Great job :)
ReplyDeleteThanks. And thanks for stopping by.
DeleteGrumpy Bears unite! Love how both of our bears end up in a positive light! :)
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DeleteSweet grumpy bear story with a satisfying ending-love it!
ReplyDeleteThanks Miss Charlotte!
DeleteWas Genevieve the secret admirer or was it just a happy coincidence? =) Great story!
ReplyDeleteYes she was. I was only allowed 214 words so I hoped people would assume that, lol :0)
DeleteIt's so hard writing just 214, isn't it? Mine also is 214 exactly, but the first story was 299 and the second one hovered around 250. Finally came up with one that fit. :)
ReplyDeleteGood for you Miss Jen. I had to revise considerably several times to get this one down to 214 as well :0)
DeleteAw, I love a happy ending. True love wins out. :)Very cute!
ReplyDeleteThanks Miss Cheryl :0)
DeleteSo sweet! Love that young love blossomed & remained into adulthood (and chased away the grumpies!).
ReplyDeleteThanks Miss Patricia :0)
DeleteAhh true love endures! Very sweet story.
ReplyDeleteThanks Jean :0)
DeleteI like how you used the mailman as one of your characters.....and that he tried to avoid Grumpy Bear too! And then he received pink envelope...Love that! Great job! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Miss Carrie :0)
Deletenice one Aileen Stewart
ReplyDeleteThank you Miss Kim!
DeleteMy favorite kind of love story! Just r ight for valentines day!
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing! :)
Thanks. And thanks for stopping by!
DeleteAw! I'm glad Harold will have the chance to live happily ever after near his Genevieve! :) Thanks for a sweet story, Aileen, and for joining in the contest fun!
ReplyDeleteThanks for being such a great contest host :0)
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